Feedbacks please really important and urgent?

I would change your line about the coals and rocks because i don't understand how it relates to the appearance of the person in the sonnet that's what Shakespeare is writing about in that line I also didn't understand your line about the river shakespeare is saying she doesn't compare to music. Also I'm not sure what types if rhyme you're allowed to use but "know" and "eyebrows" are a different type of rhyme than what I think you should use and just one more suggestion the "are" after gr you should change to "is" other than that I think you did an excellent job hoped this helped good luck!!!!!!!